tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post776101048322833353..comments2022-05-01T19:17:25.176-07:00Comments on Bus Full of Losers: Entry for Jason Duke's Red Hot Writing ContestJohn Mantoothhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06676689707345808612noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-57258438740915568432010-08-06T00:29:36.531-07:002010-08-06T00:29:36.531-07:00Great story, John. Great pacingGreat story, John. Great pacingRob Kitchinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05567424969308636082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-38609561077854119472010-06-18T02:42:39.731-07:002010-06-18T02:42:39.731-07:00Splendid story. And it's a finalist.
List here...Splendid story. And it's a finalist.<br />List here:<br />http://pdbrazill.blogspot.com/Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-1553165208273034442010-05-19T17:48:26.131-07:002010-05-19T17:48:26.131-07:00Hey, thanks Jonas! I'm so glad you liked it.Hey, thanks Jonas! I'm so glad you liked it.John Mantoothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06676689707345808612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-843596201409904062010-05-19T13:07:31.906-07:002010-05-19T13:07:31.906-07:00"...looking for the boundaries not because he..."...looking for the boundaries not because he wanted to stay behind them, but because he wanted to move past them. Me, on the other hand, I was looking for something absolute, some secret, some reason for why things stayed together and why they fell apart..."<br /><br />oh my goodness! wow! <br /><br />i'm gonna go read everything you've ever posted right now!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17161197084138588644noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-14638778645129404192010-05-17T18:49:34.487-07:002010-05-17T18:49:34.487-07:00Thanks so much, Joyce. I'm so glad you liked ...Thanks so much, Joyce. I'm so glad you liked it.John Mantoothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06676689707345808612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-52124628687291894972010-05-17T13:01:49.722-07:002010-05-17T13:01:49.722-07:00This is absolutely amazing. The characters you cr...This is absolutely amazing. The characters you created and explored and then let us get to know, however briefly, showed us a lifetime. All I can say is, what a perfect, perfect piece this is. Positively.Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-16050365847231445512010-05-15T16:17:03.624-07:002010-05-15T16:17:03.624-07:00Thanks for the kind words, Lee. And for pointing ...Thanks for the kind words, Lee. And for pointing out the typos! I fixed them both.<br /><br />Thanks again!John Mantoothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06676689707345808612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2392453662076817158.post-44192379312826950622010-05-15T15:34:27.833-07:002010-05-15T15:34:27.833-07:00Hey John. Great story. Loved the tension, characte...Hey John. Great story. Loved the tension, characterization and depth! Best of luck in the contest. I only saw two typos: <br /><br />There was something ingratiating about him (((them.)))<br /><br /> I still don’t, though the perspective of time (((as))) given me some ideas.<br /><br />Rockin' man!Lee Thompson/Thomas Morgan/James Logan/Julian Vaughnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08961562523377985551noreply@blogger.com